I am
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01-02-2011, 04:30 PM,
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I am
For the people and their tears
For their imperfections and fears For the cries and the stress For all the lies in this mess For my family and friends For the twists and the bends For the journey I take For this life that I make For my shallows and deeps For this pain that I keep For the words that I write, and the ones that I say For the price that I owe, the one I must pay For all that is, was, and can be I offer all that I am So do not ask more of me - Just had an urge to write something. I don't really know if it's a poem, could be just a collection of rhyming words First stab at anything like it either way. Constructive criticism is always appreciated.
To answer your question, yes. But probably no.
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01-03-2011, 12:03 AM,
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RE: I am
shit that is good!!!!
but if you dont mind me saying, this is more of a rock song that would be song by Coldplay, and i spotted owl love them!!!!! great job Flesh!! Cheers Matt P.S i love your quote
the only thing we got from the war was to learn that there isnt safety in numbers
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01-03-2011, 02:50 AM,
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RE: I am
Thank you for the kind words. I'm glad you liked it =) It is a bit sentimental, which is what Coldplay songs always seem like to me, if that is what you were getting at. I don't know if the words would suit a rock song, but I guess there's only one way to find out. Good ole fashioned power chords
The quote is an old Cherokee saying or perhaps from an indian poet named Kabir. Always thought it was the former 'til a recent google search
To answer your question, yes. But probably no.
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01-03-2011, 08:34 AM,
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I like it as well.
@Nero - please try not to swear on the boards. The forum guidelines (rule no. 12) are very clear. TIA
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01-03-2011, 09:02 AM,
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Ok no probs
I will replace em with words like geez and dang
the only thing we got from the war was to learn that there isnt safety in numbers
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01-03-2011, 01:44 PM,
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Thanks
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